Sunday, September 9, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday

I am back to doing SSS! When I had to go on hiatus, I'd been highlighting sentences from a short story that released two years ago, a contemporary gay erotica piece called Yesterday's Names, so I've decided I'm going to stick with that for the month of September. It's the story of Jonathan Lynch, a teacher who goes to Italy for a very special purpose. It's not as easy to face as he hoped, though, and he's gone out to a local club in hopes of some distraction.

He regarded me with a half-smile, wide-set brown eyes friendly and inquisitive. Soft hazel flecks in them caught the evening sun. His dark, shoulder-length hair was combed off his face, tucked behind his ears like it annoyed him rather than as a fashion statement, and the shadows of the beard making itself known for the night barely masked the adorable cleft in his square chin.

“Hello,” he said, his soft voice carrying through the dance music.

Somehow, I managed a croaked, “Hi.” Mr. Personality, that’s me.


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18 comments:

Jess Schira said...

I don't know if it's what you were going for, but I found this snippet to be very sweet. I love the awkwardness and believability in the final paragraph.

charmainegordon author said...

Charming and believable. Good description.

Jessica Subject said...

LOL Very cute and wonderful description! :)

elingregory said...

Welcome back! And with such a lovely six as well. I love your protagonists voice.

Anonymous said...

Love your description and chuckled at his desription of himself in the last sentence. Nice job!

Christine Warner said...

Oops...sorry...Anonymous was me! lol...sometimes my fingers get out of control! lol

sue said...

Welcome back! Love the humour

Eleri Stone said...

Vivien! Glad to see you back. Missed your writing:)

Kate Meader said...

Oh, what a great description--all that eloquence in his head and then all he can say is "Hi." Perfect.

Susanna Fraser said...

Love the vivid description!

Amy Gregory said...

I love the description, you can very easily picture the man in your head! Great six!

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Welcome back, Vivien, you've been missed. And, yes, you create the most *human* men with your descriptions. Lovely six.

melissamackinnon said...

Love the last line! A great six.

Laura Kaye said...

Cute last line! And great description!

J.C. Martin said...

He sounds tasty. :)

Veronica Scott said...

Glad to have you back! Enjoyed this snippet - I hope his encounter proceeds in a happy direction! Excellent excerpt as always...

Evelyn Jules said...

First off, you have an awesome blog! Second, what a fabulous six! Your description of this guy made me want to crawl through my computer screen. :D Great work!

Sarah Ballance said...

I'm so glad you're back! I loved the descriptions, and the cover is beautiful!