My eyes flew open to see Leandro slowly setting down the guitar, but my racing heart had spots dancing in my vision, blood red and white hot to match the heat seeping from my pores. Sweat glued my shirt to my back and my hair to my temples, and the light scruff of my beard itched from the dampness.
But I was frozen in place, trying to decipher the rampaging confusion coursing through my thoughts and flesh. Emotions that ran so deep, I ached even when left with only their memory. Possibilities that went against everything I believed, presented in my voice, with my face. Truth that shouldn’t have been, because its existence threatened the very world I’d created for myself.
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33 comments:
Excellent description! :)
Great description - I can feel it all!
Amazing. I was breathless reading it. I can't wait to read more of this.
This was seriously intense. Great six, as usual, Vivien! Can't wait to read more. :-D
Great intensity! Sounds like an interesting story.
Powerful response to Leandro as he fights/is swamped by his emotions. Great six!
What an intensly powerful six. Wonderful.
I love his confusion and his resistance to accepting the truth. Well done, Vivien. :)
Wow. Such an intense, vivid description. Well done!
Very strong and so stunning in the reader's mind - great job!
Great use of physical details to make his emotions feel genuine. Well done!
Such an effective description I almost felt like he was feeling! Enjoyed the excerpt, intriguing situation going on!
Now I want to know why he had that reaction!
WOW. Intense, descriptive, just great!
Intense, felt like I was there, great 6!
Intense and LOVE this line "Emotions that ran so deep, I ached even when left with only their memory." Whoa!
Wow, those are some intense emotions! Wonder what he saw? Brilliant descriptions!
Great intense passage. And striking cover!
Oh wow. I have to know what the memory was, to shake him like that. Something intense and passionate, I'm assuming. Will you tell us next week, please? :)
Love everything about this - the spell, his vision, the tension. Wonderful.
Intense and emotional, very well done :)
Loved that last line! Poor guy, having his self-created world threatened. That's about as bad as it gets. . . But why do I think you're going to make it even worse? ;)
Wonderfully descriptive...and I LOVE that cover!
Intense emotions!
Excellent description. Fantastic writing!
Whoa, that's wicked-intense! So much depth here - wonderful six!
I agree, very intense, wow, what passion!
Very emotional six! Great job!
All I can say is Wow.
Great snippet, Vivien--the confusion of thought and emotion comes through cleanly. Thanks for sharing!
Love the intensity in this snippet. Your writing is fantastic!
Beautifully written description!
Excellent six!! Really intense with the emotions, LOVE IT xx
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