The heroine is Dr. Maya Sheldon, a pediatric oncologist in San Francisco. At the start of the story, she's leaving work late, hears a cry for help off the parking lot, and runs to help. The woman she thought was dead stands up when a man shows up, and he's just told Maya he needs her to come with him. Not quite an auspicious start for our two leads to meet, let's just say.
She realized he hadn’t said, “I won’t hurt you,” which made her terror about what he really wanted burn just a little bit brighter. “I’m thinking ... no,” she started to say, and then stopped when she saw the familiar strobe of police lights at the end of the alley. Relief flooded through her as her pace hesitated, but it must’ve shown in her face because the stranger’s head whipped around to see what she was looking at.
“What did you do?” he asked.
“It’s called 911, asshole,” she retorted. “Now’s the time you might want to think about running before they lock you up.”
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18 comments:
nice post
The police car strobe would be quite a relief in this situation. Great six!
Nice tension. The internal dialogue really gets the reader inside her head. Nicely done!
Ha! Take that. Yeah, I'm not really thinking it'll stop him, but it was a good try on her part. :) Fun six, Vivien.
Wow, such an intriguing excerpt! :)
Well I miss the characters from last week. These two certainly got off to a bad footing so it would seem. Don't think he appreciates the coppers presence
could you turn off the catcha please
I like this -- very different reactions to those flashing lights! His "What did you do?" gives a nice glimpse of his character.
Those police lights gave me a sense of relief, except for some lingering dread that even the cops might not be enough in this situation! Great excerpt!
Oooh, that "what did you do?" really raises the tension here. Great job on this six! (And good luck with the awards!)
I love her retort to him. Great six.
Love her attitude, and I suspect it'll serve her well in coming days, er, nights.
Glad she thought to call 911 before she rushed out to help--but was it enough? I'm here, BTW--don't know why my link was inactivated.
You go, Maya!
Ooh, this is tense, l hope the police are there for her and not answering some other call!
Something tells me it's not going to be that easy....
Good for you, Maya! But I don't think the police will be much help... :)
Love your six! It makes me want to read more :)
Oh, loved this snippet!
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