Sunday, March 4, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday

Welcome to my SSS! For the months of March and April, I've decided to highlight sentences from the very first novel I had published, a het vampire erotic romance called Chains of Jericho. It was the very first book I had final in EPIC's ebook awards (then called the EPPIE), and since I find out in two weeks whether one of the two titles I have that finaled this year have won, I figured this was a good time to share the one that started it all.

The heroine is Dr. Maya Sheldon, a pediatric oncologist in San Francisco. At the start of the story, she's leaving work late, hears a cry for help off the parking lot, and runs to help. The woman she thought was dead stands up when a man shows up, and he's just told Maya he needs her to come with him. Not quite an auspicious start for our two leads to meet, let's just say.

She realized he hadn’t said, “I won’t hurt you,” which made her terror about what he really wanted burn just a little bit brighter. “I’m thinking ... no,” she started to say, and then stopped when she saw the familiar strobe of police lights at the end of the alley. Relief flooded through her as her pace hesitated, but it must’ve shown in her face because the stranger’s head whipped around to see what she was looking at.

“What did you do?” he asked.

“It’s called 911, asshole,” she retorted. “Now’s the time you might want to think about running before they lock you up.”


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18 comments:

RAJEEV KULSHRESTHA said...

nice post

Gem Sivad said...

The police car strobe would be quite a relief in this situation. Great six!

A.S. Fenichel said...

Nice tension. The internal dialogue really gets the reader inside her head. Nicely done!

Siobhan Muir / Meg Palevich said...

Ha! Take that. Yeah, I'm not really thinking it'll stop him, but it was a good try on her part. :) Fun six, Vivien.

Jessica Subject said...

Wow, such an intriguing excerpt! :)

sue said...

Well I miss the characters from last week. These two certainly got off to a bad footing so it would seem. Don't think he appreciates the coppers presence

could you turn off the catcha please

Ruthie said...

I like this -- very different reactions to those flashing lights! His "What did you do?" gives a nice glimpse of his character.

Veronica Scott said...

Those police lights gave me a sense of relief, except for some lingering dread that even the cops might not be enough in this situation! Great excerpt!

Sarah Ballance said...

Oooh, that "what did you do?" really raises the tension here. Great job on this six! (And good luck with the awards!)

Nina Pierce said...

I love her retort to him. Great six.

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Love her attitude, and I suspect it'll serve her well in coming days, er, nights.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Glad she thought to call 911 before she rushed out to help--but was it enough? I'm here, BTW--don't know why my link was inactivated.

Cara McKenna said...

You go, Maya!

gemma parkes said...

Ooh, this is tense, l hope the police are there for her and not answering some other call!

Krystal Wade said...

Something tells me it's not going to be that easy....

diannehartsock said...

Good for you, Maya! But I don't think the police will be much help... :)

Corinne Davies said...

Love your six! It makes me want to read more :)

Sandra Sookoo said...

Oh, loved this snippet!